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Thriller khaamoshiya...Ek Rahasya (Completed)

So dono finally disha ke ghar pahunch hi gayi... waise dono ko yeh nahi malum ki bilkul sahi jagah par aa pahunchi hai..

hmm..
Shweta ke sath disha kaafi der tak discussion ki...
disha aur khas kar vaishali toh jaake bali hi chadha deti unlogo ki.. par Shweta ne rok liya... warna nazara kuch aur hota...
so disha ne saare photos delete kar di...
hmm... Nisha ke case mein, yeh rohan ka baap par bhi shaq hai.. Shweta ne rajveer se bhi saari baat batayi... rajveer bhi sahmat hai disha aur shweta ki baaton se... ab Shweta sirf un 4 students ki hi nahi balki nisha ke case ko bhi nayi disha dene shayad jaipur jaa rahi hai...
I think disha ko us Deepak pe shaq hai... maybe woh ladka kuch thik nahi laga ho..
isliye photos delete hone ki baat ushe batane se maana kiya... aur sath hi sakth hidayat di ki woh log rohan ki baat toh sune par amal na kare.. chahe toh bahana hi kyun na maar de... taaki unpe shaq na ho jaaye..
Khair sochne wali baat yeh hai ki kya sach mein nisha ke hatya ke piche us gajendra ka hath hai?
Oh God
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yeh vaishali bhi na
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Woh joh bol rahi hai woh 101%sach hai
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aur in dono ko yeh baatein comedy lag rahi hai
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just imagine.. indono ko pata chal jaye ki Vaishali akhir kis bala ka naam hai.. Maybe ushi jagah behosh ho jaye.. Shayad coma mein chali jaye
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Varsha-didi....didi.
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Kiski itni himmat ki vaishali ko college se bahar kare..
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lagta hai unlogo ko apni jaan pyari nahi
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Sabki Bali chadhegi Great vaishali
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Khair let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skill
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1st part
isme ek Nisha naam ke girl ka murder ho jata hai ...aur Nisha ke bato se lagata hai ki murderer uski fraind hai....aur Nisha ne naam liya hai aanchal...oh ye Nisha commissioner ki beti hai.... commissioner raajveer hai joki as usual nidar nirbhik imandar hai...police tahkikat karti hai but murderer so intelligent wo ek bhi saboot nhi chhodata....ye kafi dimag ghuma dene wali baat hai readers Tak iss paheli me phans gaye...kafi sare sawal achanak paida ho gaye the ,for ex - Nisha pub kyo gayi thi, murderer ka motive kya tha...kis hathiyar se murder hua..ek baat aur thi ki ye kisi criminal dwara liya gaya revenge nhi tha kyoki revenge me log aksar challenge karte hai..lekin dekhane me kisi expert ka kam lag rha tha...yani story ki shuruwat damadar rhi .... lekin kahate hai na ki aparadhi kitna bhi shatir ho koi n koi galti Kar hi deta hai ya uske plan and execution me galti rah hi jati hai ..raajveer sir ke anusar Nisha pub bar etc me nhi jati but wo gayi iska matbal wo apne marji se gayi ,and uska Mumbai me koi aisa fraind nhi hai so wo pakka college fraind se milane gayi hogi...bas pahunch jao uske sabhi frainds ke pass murder wale din kaha the puchho ...aur Nisha ka call detels check karo... murderer chitthi to bheji nhi hogi Milne bulane ke liye...khair aisa kuchh hua nhi so aage dekhate hai..Nisha ki bahan vaishu hai joki revenge ke liye pagal hai...aur isi bich me aanchal naam ka khauf bad rha hai ...idhar vaishu apne Bhai ki hamesha darati rhti hai..apne gharwalo se baat nhi karti ...iska matbal saf hai ki wo apne anadar ke gusse ko nafarat me badal rhi hai... vaishu yaha ek phycologist se milti hai ...aur yaha doctor khud vaishu se impress ho jata hai..... aur iss doctor ki baat sunkar raajveer sir ka matha thanka ki kahi murderer vaishu to nhi....aur iss ko aur majbuti deti hai vaishu ka murder weapon batana, matbal yaha readers ke mind se khelne ka full plan ready ....aur issi bich apne Bhai Arun par chaku se hamla ...matbal sare readers pagal ho Jaye aisa full proof plan tha ankita mam ka
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.... aur in sab dimag ki naso ko hila dene wali ghatanoao ke bich ..masoom vashu ka pahala shikar bana Ravi joki usse time pass love karta hai ( ek taraf)...aur ye ho gaya Ravi kidnape ...sala yaha ho kya rha hai matbal dimag kam karna band ho gaya Bhai ... matbal kab kya ho Jaye aap pahale se anuman nhi laga sakte..aur ye Ravi ke sath Masoom and cute vaishu ka brutality matbal kitna romanchak hai na ....hath par chaku se rakhi banana matbal khatarnak bolo to ekdam khatarnak...aur isi bich raajveer sir aa jate hai ,aur apne beti par gun tan dete hai..but mujhe ussi ek second ke window me vaishu ka plan mujhe pata chal gaya... achanak waha raajveer sir ka aana iska matbal saf hai vaishu Ravi ko marna nhi chahti thi bas usse Dara rhi thi but ye darana bhi kafi khatarnak tha...agar vaishu ko marna hota to wo kab ka Ravi ko maar deti but wo Ghar se Jana chahati thi wo bhi iss tarah ki koi bhi uske pichhe usse dhundane na aaye ...iska matbal saf hai ki wo jaan gayi hai ki Nisha ka murderer kon hai tatha kaha hai..taki wo mar bhi Jaye iss Jung me to usse koi afsos ya dukh na ho..aur 1st part ke ant me vaishu pahuchati hai disha ke Ghar ...I think secend part se story bildup hogi aur Kai ansulajhe bato ka jabab milega...
1st was outstanding ankita mam ....kafi achchhi aur sadhi hui shuruwat thi....aapka ek bhi update iss part me boring sa nhi laga , yaha Tak ki ek bhi line miss nhi Kar sakte kyoki harek line me ek update ke barabar excitement bani rahti thi..aur update ke last ka suspence aapko agala update padane par majbur Kar denga... outstanding writing dear...good job
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2nd part :- to ab vaishu pahuch gayi hai disha ke Ghar ek kutte ke katne se bachane ke through...ye vaishu ke irade se lag rha hai wo yahi rhane wali hai..matbal murderer kahi agal bagal hi hai.. aur wahi kutta ab tanu ke Ghar me bhi aa gaya kuchh strange lag rha hai.. aur kutte ka naam chaku ...ha vaishu se yahi ummid bhi hai.... Arun bhi chal Diya Delhi job ke liye na na na wo pakka vaishu ke pass Jane Wala hai ..kya vaishu ne khud bulaya hai kyoki ek bar chaku ka hamla jhelane ke baad khud vaishu ke pichhe Jane ki himmat to nhi honi chahiye....aur idhar ek aur khun hota hai jisse picture me dharmesh sir aate hai..full on Josh me..aur raajveer sir se vaishu ke bare me sunate khun me ubal as gaya dharmesh sir ke ...very good ju hi ab kuchh Kar sakte ho
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...are wah arun bhi sahi jagah pahunch gaya.. matbal kuchh to jhol hai...ye Arun mahashay to full form me gana ga rhe hai..wo alag baat hai ki dusaro ko kauwa ki aawaj lag rhi hai.. matter ye karta hai ki apne ko apni aawaj koyal ki tarah lagani chahiye...keep it up
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... Vaisu aur tanu ko manchalo me chheda galat baat bilkul galat baat ab to marna tay hai..na lagata hai Bach jayenge kyoki Arun aakar unhe samajha rha hai..lekin ye kya Kar diye wo Arun ko hi bhaga diye..Shri Krishna ji ne ek baar kaha tha ki [color=rgb(255,]jab Nash manush par chhata hai pahale Vivek mar jata..[/color][color=rgb(0,]..[/color] ...aur idhar college me vaishu ko adult bato ko sunane ko milta hai tanu ke fraind dwara... dharmesh sir vaishu ke chakkar me Arun ke room me aa jate hai...aur ye kya dharmesh sir ka bhi namkaran ho gaya Arun ke hatho. Aur raho jawan larke ke sath tumhe porn dikha ke Mana to kahana...are ye kya dhammu,dhamiya, dhamaki
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....sabhi family ka namkaran ho gaya Oye dhammu chal baba Arun ko 151rs ka Prasad chada
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..,.ye vaishaali Arun ko apna bf Bata di ...sach kaha gaya hai ki 1jhoot ko dabane ke liye 100 jhoot bolana parata hai...ab ye dharmesh par vaishu ko shak ho gaya ju to gaye dhammu 12 ke bhav me....ye dharmesh sir ko achanak ye sari family related ghatana hona hatprabh Kar gayi ...aur last me wo dhamaki ( dharmesh sir ki beti nhi) wali video se dar ke bhag hi liye.. mujhe lag rha hai ki iski madad aanach Kar rhi hai...aur college me aaj phir wahi adult talk but aaj vaishu interested lag rhi hai aur Ghar par aake disha se bate bhi Kar rhi hai iss bare me...ab iss picture me nayi kitdaar aayi hai Sweta madam aur aate hi chal chal di apne bahan Neha ko waha bhejkar...ye plan bhi sahi hai....aur issi bich mla ke Ghar jakar uske bete ko chutiya banakar uske hi farmhouse par ussi ko dardnak maut de di ... Matlab wow..siharan paida Kar dene wale scenes..aur ab to vaishu ne ek talwar banawa li hai khud ke liye aur usse chhupa di hai Arun ke Ghar me... matbal dimag to hai larki me..Neha ko dekhate hi Arun ko o maaa goooo truuuuu lobe ho gaya...aur dono Milkar kirayedar union bhi baba liye.. matbal dosti ho gayi ...yani aadha pyar to usse abhi mil gaya pura ke liye abhi time hai....aur isi bich kuchh halki fulki mastiya hoti rahti hai ..aur raajveer sir side se plan banate rahate hai ....aur isi bich disha ka kidnapping ....lekin koi disha ko aise kyo kidnape karega... are kidnapper to aanchal hai matbal kuchh to massage Dena chahati hai wo vaishu ko...shayad ye ki tum mere pahuch se dur nhi ho...Neha Sweta madam ko bhejkar disha ko bacha leti hai.. aur issi bich aanchal aur Sweta madam ke bich tagadi fight hui...sabhi ko aanchal maar di thi par disha aur ek ko wo bacha ke rakhi thi matbal aanchal ka plan kuchh aur hi tha...khair issi bahane Sweta madam aur vaishu ke bich mulakat bhi hoti hai...aur issi sab ke bich cricket ka challenge disha ko Arun de deta hai ..phir rat ko bat chori Karne aaye jaha pata Chala ki Neha seats madam ki bahan hai jiske Karan vaishu Neha ko Marne ka nishchay Kar leti hai... cricket ke maidan me mast halki fulki comedy ke sath match hota hai ....aur Arun se Neha ke liye aisa tha just like duniya Jaye sali bhand me mujhe parwah hi nhi...aur finally aaj ground me hi wo Neha ko perpose Kar Diya...aur Neha udash ho gayi kyoki usse lagata hai ki Arun vaishu se pyar karta hai ya usse abhi pyar ka ahasas hi nhi hua hai...vaishu jakar Arun ko dhamaki deti hai ki wo Neha ko maar dalegi. Arun to pura tav kha jata hai iss baat par .... But lagata nhi ki vaishu Neha ko sach me marana chahti hai..kyoki vaishu planning karke ya ye sochkar nhi Marti ki usse marana hai...uska decision on the spot hota hai...Neha dar ke mare apne bahan ko bula leti hai... Sawati madam bhi ek lead ke jariye aanchal ki real identity pata laga hi leti hai...great job Swati madam
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.....aur idhar vaishu ki pata chal jata hai ki disha hi aanchal hai... Matlab sare readers pagal ...what the fuck wali situation ....aur disha ka Nisha ko Marne ki kahani wakai sare readers ke soch ko dhatta bata ke sabko chaunka Diya aur ek baat clear Kar di ... it's not end it's just begining of a bloodlust war...aur disha kudh ko chaku maar ke ghayal Kar leti hai taki wo mar mar ke apne papo ko prayashchit Kar sake...but Nisha ke katal ka reason sunke aur Nisha aur disha ki dosti tatha disha ka vaisu ke liye pyar dekh ke vaishu disha ko apni bahan manane lagi thi...kafi emotional scenes create ho gaya Jo asnkho me 2 bund aanshu ke la hi diye..aur yahi pata chalata hai ki vaishu apne ko coconut ki tarah show Kar rahi thi ..Bahar se hard but anadar se soft....
Sawati aur raajveer sir inko manf karke inhe nayi shuruwat Karne ki Salah dete hai but bato se hi vaishu apni mansha Bata deti hai..yani ham nhi sudharenge....
Iss part me bhi aapki story par pakad ekdam majbut thi... great job
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... storyline buld up wakai Kamal ka tha ..ye apko iss story ko anat Tak padane par majbur Kar dene Wala part tha.... brilliant writing skills ankitarani ji....
 

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